Script evolution

It's fascinating to see how your idea is being developed during this module.
It seems like every week the script changes and I must say - it's better and better.

This was my original idea, not more than a month ago:

Sunday afternoon. The guy with the beer belly mows the lawn. Suddenly the mower jams. He's rying to launch it and nothing happens. Tries few more times and falls. Then, the mower runs itself and starts rushing straight into the wife's flower garden, destroying everything on it's way. His wife looks out the door in horror / shock. The guy gives up.

Then, after the first feedback:

1. Black screen. #1 opens garage doors and gets his old lawn mower.
2. Totally resigned, with a bit of trouble starts mowing his small lawn.
3. While he is close to the hedge, sees his neighbour (#2) lying on a lounger, while his wireless, brand new lawn mower does all the job.
4. #1 gets really jealous. Looks at his lawn mower then at his neighbour's. Then, suddenly he gets an idea.
5. He goes to the garage, gets the shovel and goes back.
6. #1 kneels on the sidewalk near the lawn of his neighbour and with a bit of turf he tries to lure the automatic mower. Behaving like he's luring a dog.
7. The mower follows the path (on the sidewalk) made of turf and starts mowing #1's lawn. #1 lays back and drinks a glass of lemonade.
8. Suddenly, #2 sees what happened. He comes to the #1 lawn and takes back his mower. #1 is sad again. Then, he gets a brilliant idea.
9. #1 is relaxing and drinking lemonade while the 'gloomy' sheep is eating the lawn.

However, the viewer couldn't empathize with our main character (#1) so I thought of:

There was still something wrong, like contrast not visible or Max being too nice - no reason why Carl can't help him.
So, I made a few changes:
1. Max saying rude things to Carl
2. Carl acting like Ned Flanders saying 'the old ways are the best'
3. Max smashing the mower rather than being scared
4. Carl offering to lend a mower for a tiny bit of salvaged garden - being mean.

But again, that was too complicated and confusing. So, the last, simpler version:


And this version was sent to tutors for some feedback.


Stay tuned!